Song Sparrow, Winter (Photo credit: Ed Gaillard)
I joined an online group of poetic souls at dVerse. I’m just beginning to poke around and see what I can dive into over there, but for this week’s “Poetics”, we are invited to work in First Person Narrative. First person narrative is storytelling through the voice of the character, at a particular moment, and referring to themselves. We see things through the narrators point of view. This then is my offering;
Provision
Today it is enough ~
this fragrant cedar bower
this covering of down
well fluffed against the chill.
Today it is enough ~
backyard feeder brimming
millet seed and sunflower,
snow melting in the bath
a slackening of thirst.
Today it is enough ~
echo of dusk song thick
on air, wrappings of
wings tight warm,
my head upon my breast,
I keep this winter space,
this grace before flight.
Inspiration of Matthew 10:29-31 Are not two sparrows sold for a penny? Yet not one of them will fall to the ground outside your Father’s care. And even the very hairs of your head are all numbered. So don’t be afraid; you are worth more than many sparrows.
BUDDY BREATHING 
nice….love the smell of cedar….and the dusk song…and winters sleep….lots of cool elements in this….just fixed your link at dverse as well so you might get a few more poets popping in now…smiles.
welcome
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thank you brian… for coming by and for being so kind and helpful… I will have to figure out what I did wrong :) good to in the company of others again.
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nice…i like how you make the sparrow talk…and so true about him providing the things we need for us..smiles
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hello claudia… appreciate your visit and kind words. yes… all in season :)
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This is really done well. It has a certain feel to it that just feels right. I really like the observational choices you included here. Really a very nice write. Thanks for sharing.
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I appreciate you dropping by and encouraging me. I look forward to reading your poetry as well.
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I agree with the others – this is a well obeserved piece of writing. And isn’t amazing how the birds are happy to simply accept that what they need will be provided when they need it, but we strive to make it be there?
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Thanks Tony… I think the exercise of first person really encouraged paying attention to details… so thank you for your kind words.
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L – I’ve been reading a ton of Pacific Northwest poets lately. This one has some of those elements most illustrative of their work. A subtlety, nuanced and fresh, lithe and real. I loved this one.
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Hey Rob, who are you reading? There are many great ones (I immediately think of Luci Shaw) I’m wondering if the spirit of place infiltrates our work after a while? Thanks for coming by!!
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Dan Peters, Dorothy Trodgon, Brooke Matson, Jenifer Browne Lawrence…Luci Shaw? Come on, always Luci! There is a spirituality of place, a deeply biblical idea, that pervades who we become over time.
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I think a sparrow would be in the moment and content like that. Very cool :)
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Thank you… :)
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very encouraging… nice use of the Scripture
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Thank you. I appreciate your work as well.
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Absolutely… and thank you very much!
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Carry on loving when it seems there’s no love to be found, forgiving more than you think you can handle, remembering that you too, are a gorgeous child of God.
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Sending you and your family, the warmest African sunshine!
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